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14/10/09 bypass redoing old analysis- i have redone the analysis located at the bottem of this page, i have been halped majorly by this activity and can see a big improvment, i probably havn't focused on language quite enough however. Bypasses Autobiographical nature allows McGirr to share some wisdom that he has learned through personal experiences, his values and overall outlook on life he has gained along his journey and many years as a Jesuit priest and share them with his readers. In extract one McGirr likens leaving the Jesuit order to being “divorced, sacked and evicted all on the same day, except it is a decision that you make yourself” it is undoubtedly a major life adjustment and one that demands McGirr re-examine his views and values, his journey of the Bypass is his chance to do this. Within this extract McGirr revisits and shares with readers an important reoccurring life lesson that things aren’t always how they appear at face value, so if you judge the situation straight off you will often be mistaken through his observation a motorbike gang. McGirr is also showing people always have the ability to surprise you and have many layers, their appearance is scratching only very surface of them as a human being. This life lesson is clearly very important value held by McGirr as it is revisited many times throughout Bypass using examples of Cliff young looking like a frail old man but who was still able to win the marathon and McGirr himself outwardly forty and overweight but still being able to conquer the Hume. The language McGirr uses moves at different speeds as does McGirr’s journey overall it can appear to dwindle or to speed off rapidly, as with any drastic life change McGirr is going through a series of emotions that accompany the adjustment, the language reflects these emotional changes. In this extract McGirr points out that the Hume is a “monument to restlessness” and it is ironic that he is trying to rest alongside something so ever changing and in motion but McGirr is ever changing himself and evolving constantly through the seasons and circumstances in his life. McGirr breathes new life into the Hume and by telling its often overlooked story it becomes alive and a character within itself, the Hume however also gives McGirr new life as he had become “to compliant” as part of the Jesuit Order. The journey of the Hume marked a new beginning for McGirr, in another part of the text McGirr claims that Cliff Young brought the Hume to life in his day as a marathon runner, McGirr clearly admired Cliff and is following suit and bringing the iconic Hume to life all over again for readers. In the second extract McGirr reflects on the ideas presented in “The Wizard of Oz” and “Waiting For Godot” McGirr compares the values revealed within these classic tales with the values he holds himself, the link he uses to compare them all is there use of “musing about roads.” McGirr points out that there are many important life lessons to be found in both stories but the idea of nether as a whole appeals to him, then reflects on instead what does. He gives the reader the secret he has discovered about leading a happy life which is “enjoying your limitations” he also tells us “the road can go in two directions at once… the rest of us can only go in one” by this McGirr means enjoy the choices you have made and the path that you are going on, you can change direction but it has to be one way or another so don’t always think that the grass is greener. McGirr has changed direction in his life and is enjoying the journey instead of wasting his life looking back with regret for what he has missed out on or “chosen not to do”. Both these extracts reflect on views and values McGirr holds as a person and the wisdom he has gained and is still learning “we learn something new every day.”

1)Frankenstein List of the 10 most important features, aspects, characters and/or ideas in your text:  Characters: Victor Frankenstein, Frankenstein’s creature, The De Lacey family, De Lacey (the father), Safie, Felix  Justine, Captain Walton, Clerval, Henry  The Frankenstein family: Elizabeth, Victor’s mother, father younger brother William Ideas: family and belonging, The nature of life and death, Science going too far with humans playing God (with Victor becoming God by bestowing life to the creature) , Obsession (Victor is obsessive with his quest for knowledge and Elizabeth) , good versus evil, who is the real monster Victor or the creature, friendship, Power,( Victor had power over the creature if he gave it life or not ect then the creature had the power over Victor later on with physical strength and intimidation) Motifs and symbols- biblical references, light and darkness (day and night)Passages that illustrate these things, 2) For each one find as many passages as you can to illustrate it in some way. Obsession- Chapter IV “from this day natural philosophy, and particularly chemistry in the most comprehensive sense of the term, became nearly my sole occupation…” Chapter one when talking about Elizabeth Family and belonging- chapter V Victor has a family that cares about him unlike creature illustrated when he receives a concerned letter from Elizabeth.

Litrature Homework Close Analysis due 12/10/09

Extract one : When I found so astonishing a power placed within my hands, I hesitated a long time concerning the manner in which I should employ it. Although I possessed the capacity of bestowing animation, yet to prepare a frame for the reception of it, with all its intricacies of fibers, muscles, and veins, still remained a work of inconceivable difficulty and labor. I doubted at first whether I should attempt the creation of a being like myself, or one of simpler organization; but my imagination was too much exalted by my first success to permit me to doubt of my ability to give life to an animal as complex and wonderful as man. The materials at present within my command hardly appeared adequate to so arduous an undertaking; but I doubted not that I should ultimately succeed. I prepared myself for a multitude of reverses; my operations might be incessantly baffled, and at last my work be imperfect: yet, when I considered the improvement which every day takes place in science and mechanics, I was encouraged to hope my present attempts would at least lay the foundations of future success. Nor could I consider the magnitude and complexity of my plan as any argument of its impracticability. It was with these feelings that I began the creation of a human being. As the minuteness of the parts formed a great hindrance to my speed, I resolved, contrary to my first intention, to make the being of a gigantic stature; that is to say, about eight feet in height, and proportionally large. After having formed this determination, and having spent some months in successfully collecting and arranging my materials, I began. Extract two: Nothing is more painful to the human mind, than, after the feelings have been worked up by a quick succession of events, the dead calmness of inaction and certainty which follows, and deprives the soul both of hope and fear. Justine died; she rested; and I was alive. The blood flowed freely in my veins, but a weight of despair and remorse pressed on my heart, which nothing could remove. Sleep fled from my eyes; I wandered like an evil spirit, for I had committed deeds of mischief beyond description horrible, and more, much more (I persuaded myself), was yet behind. Yet my heart overflowed with kindness, and the love of virtue. I had begun life with benevolent intentions, and thirsted for the moment when I should put them in practice, and make myself useful to my fellow-beings. Now all was blasted: instead of that serenity of conscience, which allowed me to look back upon the past with self satisfaction, and from thence to gather promise of new hopes, I was seized by remorse and the sense of guilt, which hurried me away to a hell of intense tortures, such as no language can describe. This state of mind preyed upon my health, which had perhaps never entirely recovered from the first shock it had sustained. I shunned the face of man; all sound of joy or complacency was torture to me; solitude was my only consolation--deep, dark, deathlike solitude. Extract three: In this retreat I devoted the morning to labour; but in the evening, when the weather permitted, I walked on the stony beach of the sea, to listen to the waves as they roared and dashed at my feet. It was a monotonous yet ever-changing scene. I thought of Switzerland; it was far different from this desolate and appalling landscape. Its hills are covered with vines, and its cottages are scattered thickly in the plains. Its fair lakes reflect a blue and gentle sky; and, when troubled by the winds, their tumult is but as the play of a lively infant, when compared to the roarings of the giant ocean. In this manner I distributed my occupations when I first arrived; but, as I proceeded in my labor, it became every day more horrible and irksome to me. Sometimes I could not prevail on myself to enter my laboratory for several days; and at other times I toiled day and night in order to complete my work. It was, indeed, a filthy process in which I was engaged. During my first experiment, a kind of enthusiastic frenzy had blinded me to the horror of my employment; my mind was intently fixed on the consummation of my labor, and my eyes were shut to the horror of my proceedings. But now I went to it in cold blood, and my heart often sickened at the work of my hands. Close Analysis due 12/10/19 Ebony you use textual evidence very well to support you interpretations on the extracts. The use of paragraphs would have helped your analysis flow better and given an indication of where new ideas began and ended. This piece shows sound improvement and the only suggestion I could make would be to include more reference to language and symbolism. Don't just rely on the words and their meaning to provide your analysis. Look beyond the words at what is happening physically and what is being felt. You do convey Victor's emotions well during a large part of this analysis. A good job Ebony, well done!!! 1255237310 haha my paragraphs disappeared when i converted from word and i didnt notice sorry it was paragraphed originally! haha
 * These three extracts reflect embody on the changes Victor Frankenstein goes through as a character in his outlook on life and his mood as a direct result of his actions in creating the creature. Victor instilling life into the creature was the major turning point in the novel setting the course for the rest of Victor’s journey in this book and eventually leading to his demise.**
 * In the first extract Victor is overwhelmingly inspired, excited and confident about embarking on his upcoming science experiment and fulfilling his quest for knowledge unknown to man, “my imagination was too much exalted by my first success… to doubt my ability.” However it appears to the reader that Victor has not thought the big picture through and has instead jumped into his experiment blinded in a wave of enthusiasm at earlier successes. This is reflected as Victor is only talking about the practical side of the seemingly immoral experiment and his realistic ability to fulfil it “a work of inconceivable difficulty and labour.” good Victor fails to mention the possible consequences and enormity of what he is about to be a part of and whether playing God is an ethical decision in his eyes; this may be due to Victor being a complete science minded thinker. However even though Victor appears unable or unwilling to see past his imagination and goal to the reality of what he is about to do he was starting out with good intentions, this is reflected in the second extract “benevolent intentions…make myself useful to my fellow-beings.” He wasn’t doing it solely for his own gains and hoped that the findings from his experiment would “at least lay the foundations for future successes.” This extract is important to the text as a whole because it allows us to see the frame of mind Victor was in when he was hatching his plan to infuse life into lifeless matter and what his motivations and reasoning ware behind it. very good point Ebony A ongoing theme in Frankenstein is if the real monster is Frankenstein or Frankenstein’s creature but this extract allows the reader to see things from Victor's point of view makes and not see Victor as such a fiend as his thought processes and good intentions shine through. This extract also marks the turning point when Victor's decision has been made to start his project.**
 * Extract two is taken from near the middle of the text by this point Victor has conducted his experiment bringing his creature to life and Justine has died (why is this important?). All positive emotions and enthusiasm reflected in the first extract have been drained from Victor due to the consequences of his actions and hew is left depressed and regretful “a weight of despair and remorse pressed on my heart which nothing could remove.” EXCELLENT He blames himself for Justine’s death because he was the one that released the creature on the world which in a cause and effect pattern lead to William’s murder and then Justine’s downfall. Victor’s guilt was starting to have a negative physical impact on him he “wandered like an evil sprit” and alienated himself from his friends and family “solitude was my only consolidation.” good use of textual evidence Ebony Friends, family and belonging are major reoccurring themes in Frankenstein in the beginning of the book they were very important to Victor but by this point in the tale he has become mentally ill and cannot even get joy from having them in his life “I shunned the face of man.”**
 * In extract three Victor feels trapped into fulfilling the creatures request for a partner like himself. Victor clearly reflects he believes what he is doing is wrong “my labour became every day more horrible and irksome to me.” Extract two showed the reader he regretted even getting involved in the experiment to begin with and to be continuing and prolonging it in order to make the monster a partner is almost to much to bear. “it was indeed a filthy process in which I was engaged.” Extract three backs up the fact that at the beginning of the book Victor was not thinking straight and was blinded to what he was doing. “A kind of enthusiastic frenzy had blinded me to the horror of my employment.” His eyes had now been open to “the horror of my proceedings.” Time cannot be turned back however, Victor has given the monster life and the monster has changed Victor and away Victors will to live1255149726**

Close Analysis 21/9

Bypass's autobiographical nature allows McGirr to reflect on his views and values as well as life lessons he has learned along the journey of life ,(watch you don't repeat words too much. Bit much life) and journey of the Hume. Extract one from the beginning of the book reflects on big life changes McGirr is going through in leaving the priesthood he is struggling with these changes “I missed my title… I was grieving for something” Reinforcing his adjustment difficulty another time in the book that demonstrates similar changes is when he says “it’s a bit like getting divorced, sacked and evicted all on the same day”.

McGirr parallels himself with the road by saying “the road has no respect for persons or status. Nor, I used to think, did I” good! even with the view on life that a person's status doesn’t matter, McGirr grieves the loss of his title as “Father”. The way the text is written suggests that it’s not really the name he's grieving but the loss of his role in the community. McGirr identified himself by his job and status as a Priest in the church, he liked to be important to people and values relationships with others and is a very interpersonal man (Eb, watch your punctuation and spelling especially words like priest) “only other people can give you your name,” Part of the reason McGirr was grieving was because he was yet to discover who he was without his role as a prist to define him. McGirr used the Hume to break down the layers of himself on a journey of self discovery as the journey marked the beginning of his new life. McGirr uses humour in this extract when talking about the “online doctorate” to try to relate to the reader and get his message and overall point across Major reoccurring themes discussed in this passage are self/personal identity and loss. Good use of the extract to support your point. It's important that you do this and use the extract as a window to look into the rest of the text. In extract two McGirr is on his journey of the Hume with Jenny and is reflecting on his views, values and opinions try to use other words when refering to views and values the holiday booklet I gave you has a few ideas for how to do this “there are two ways of looking at the world...the concave way and the convex way.” He is also building up his relationship with Jenny through this journey and using this conversation to learn more about her and how she sees the world as well as reassessing how he sees the world in this new phase of his life journey. McGirr uses the ideas of philosophers Zeno and Elea and other philosophers throughout Bypass to reflect on timeless issues and support/reject his personal views and values. “Philosophy has often made use of the image of the road. It is the universal metaphor that can be used to illustrate anything.” McGirr like the Philosophers he mentions also uses the road as a metaphor to illustrate and support his ideas and brings the road to life so it is a character in itself. An example of McGirr using the road to illustrate an idea is in extract three where McGirr describes the road as both Cliffs “companion and adversary” and says cliff was “small enough to bring it to life.” This Cliff Young stuff seems like it's just been stuck on the end of your analysis. You could make more of this. Overall this response is good Ebony. You could go into a bit more detail and use more direct references to the extract in the context of the novel in its totality. Just have another look over the booklet to check out the views and values stuff. Well done!

Close Analysis 19/9
 * Act 2, Scene 1 and Act 3, Scene 1 from Hamlet.

 Passages two and three highlight the changes in Hamlet and Ophelia’s relationship throughout the play and what causes these changes to take place as well as the changes Hamlet goes through individually as a character. The passages look at the reoccurring themes of death and the afterlife and hamlets make sure you use a capital H for Hamlet and use a possessive apostrophe before the s. It's simple but it will annoy the examiners  fixation with it, relationships and power. In the beginning of passage two Ophelia runs to her father Polonius confused and upset due to Hamlet appearing to have gone “mad”. Polonius is drawn to the conclusion that the reason for Hamlets  madness is “The very ecstasy of love…That does affect our natures.” And tells Ophelia “I am sorry” as he now believes he was wrong about Hamlets  intentions towards Ophelia’s and his request for Ophelia to cut contact with Hamlet has lead Hamlet to fall into a spiral of madness. Ophelia tells Polonius she has indeed listened to her fathe rs  advice and “repel his fetters and denied his access to me.” Which leads Polonius to hatch the plan of a meeting between Ophelia and Hamlet to gauge whether or not love was the true cause of Hamlets madness as he believes. The audience knows more than Polonius does good! <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> about the root cause of Hamle <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">ts <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> madness at this point, if Polonius knew the whole story he would have reacted differently, this is a form of dramatic irony. <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">This paragraph has some great elements and you look at the passage from some interesting perspectives. Make sure you read over what your have written to ensure you're expressing your ideas as clearly as possible. Don't forget to look for little spelling and grammar errors. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">In this passage <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">(which passage, spell it out for the examiners in case they're not too sure) <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> more is revealed about the relationship between Ophelia and Polonius and about them individuality as characters, Polonius is now reinforced as a dominant male leader and an overbearing father, he gives Ophelia much advice attempting to control her behaviour and emotions. Polonius is always pertarde <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">(I'm not sure what oyu mean by this word Eb) <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">both through speech and body language as more powerful then Ophelia <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">(good). <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Ophelia is reinforced as being naïve, confused and young this is highlighted as she is seeking relationship advice from her father. This extract is important to the <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">paly <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> as a whole as its part of a chain of cause and effect and leads to the truth being revealed about the real reasons for <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Hamlets <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> apparent madness. <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">New idea, new paragraph <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> Passage three is of Polonius’s plan in action. The setting of a private room is important as both Polonius and Ophelia are likely to be speaking honestly as they are alone. <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Excellent, important observation <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Passage three begins with one of the most famous soliloquies in Hamlet “To be or not to be.” This soliloquy illustrates the ongoing theme of <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Hamlets <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> fixation with death and the afterlife, this theme is also illustrated further on in the book in the graveyard scene when <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Hamlets <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> holds Yorick’s scull and proclaims “ This skull had a **tongue** in it, and could sing once” also highlighting <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Hamlets <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> fascination with the physical ramifications of death. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> “To suffer the slings and arrows of outrages fortune…or to take arms against a sling of troubles… end them? To die, to sleep.” This quote holds the jist of the play it is reflecting again on <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Hamlets <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> fixation on death and suicide and his confusion over whether it is nobler choice to live thorough “The whips and scorns of time” or just end his pain once and for all through the act of self murder. This illustrates Hamlet is experiencing extremely conflicted emotions about his <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">fathers <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> death and <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">mothers <span style="color: #00ff00; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">(AAAGH 's) <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> incestuous marriages <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">only one marriage was incestuous <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> well as facing the tough decision of wether <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">whether <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> he can bring himself to kill his uncle and is looking at suicide as a way out of it all. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;">The passage paints Hamlet’s <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;">YAY!! <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> personality as a deep thinker, exercising all possibilities but who is depressed and unable to rise above his present situation and feeling dissatisfied with life. Adding to Hamle <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;">ts <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> internal conflict is the meeting Hamlet has with the ghost of his father and the ghost demanding avenging in Act One, Scene Five. Seeing the ghost of his father and being swayed by it to conduct the act of murder against his uncle go against Hamle <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;">ts <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> firm roots in reason and logic. As Haml <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;">ets <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> personality is portrayed to the audience throughout the play as analytical and a deep thinker Hamlet is inclined to think over all the courses of action and possibilities. This passage leads the audience to the interpretation over analysing every situation is contributing to Hamlets unhappiness. <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;">Maybe mention of Hamlet's indecision as a broader theme would have been relevant here. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt;"> Much imagery used in this passage in order to paint a picture for the audience “slings and arrows… whips and scorns” these things summon up images of objects designed to inflict pain, this is because this passage explores the suffering of Hamlet. These images enrich the mood of the passage and provide an insight into the character, going deeper than there <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; msobidifontweight: bold;">their <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; msobidifontweight: bold;"> surface meaning. There are many contrasting ideas are explored throughout this passage by Shakespeare through Hamlet these are opposition verses submission, bravery verses cowardice and death verses life. Along with how his relationship with and impression of his mother impacts on his interaction with Ophelia

More layers of Hamlet as a character are revealed as he explores these binary oppositions, Hamlet also illuminates for the audience what he sees to be the three main wrongs of life “The oppressor’s wrong, the proud mans contumely, The pangs of love…the insolence of office and the spurns, that patient merit of unworthy takes.” Knowing that Hamlet sees these things as very wrong allow the audience to get to know him as a character but also reinforces his judgemental side always judging what others do as wrong and letting these things affect his personal happiness. <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Soliloquies are used effectively in Hamlet to provide a window into the characters minds and allow their true feelings to be revealed to the audience as it is only them alone on stage; they are not acting under any other motives such as deceiving other characters to portray anything that isn’t true to the audience. Throughout this soliloquy Hamle <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">ts <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> true feelings and inner turmoil are revealed without smoke and mirrors. During Hamle <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">ts <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> soliloquy in this passage Hamlet refers to Ophelia as “fair” and declares “be all my sins remembered.” This shows the audience Hamlet still cared about Ophelia. Following this, Ophelia and Hamlet interact in a meeting which previously planned by her brother and father to see if hamlet is indeed “mad in love.” Hamlet responds to Ophelia aggressively and harshly when she tells him “I have remembrances of yours I have longed to re-deliver” and tells her never loved her. Hamlet reacts like this as he is generalising his anger at his mothers immorality and betrayal to all women including Ophelia and believes all women will give into betrayal eventually and that they make “fools” of men. One question the audience needs to ask themselves is does Hamlet know he is being watched by Polonius and Gertrude and does this influence his actions <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Excellent point Ebony. It's great that you're looking beyond the words that are written and exploring what the implications of actions are. Great work! <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">. Hamlet holds the power in this part of the scene over Ophelia, previously Ophelia had had the power over how the relationship with Hamlet was going to turn out and was controlling the situation by not speaking to Hamlet under her manipulative fathers advisement. Ophelia reacts to <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">hamlets <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> brutal rejection with dismay and believing <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">hamlet <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> is insane and fails to understand Hamle <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">ts <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;"> deeper motivations and emotions behind his actions. Further on in this scene following where this passage is taken from is the “Get the to a nunnery” scene. This can have a double meaning depending how it is interpreted, it can be seen as Hamlet using sarcasm and actually meaning get thee to a brothel as he believes she will become an immoral woman eventually anyway. Or rather actually meaning go to a nunnery because he didn’t want Ophelia but he didn’t want anyone else to have her either and wanted to protect her from the evils of the world so that she would stay pure. 1253339033 <span style="color: #ff004b; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 12pt; line-height: 115%;">Eb, you're doing all the right things in this extract. Apart form a few grammar and proof reading issues. It's fantastic that you're looking at the events before and after the extracts and that you're using the extracts to lead you into the play as a whole. You do a good job of linking to other scenes and analysing the relationships and the events that affect them. Just fix the little things 'cause you're doing a great job with the big things. Well done!!

__Close Analysis of 3 passages in Hamlet: extract one: Act one, Scene3, extract two: Act 3 Scene 1, extract three: Act five, Scene 1__ These extracts highlight the changes and transformations of Ophelia as a character as the play Hamlet progresses, and why this transformation occurs. The first extract which is from the beginning of the play portrays Ophelia as a lively young woman who believes Hamlet cares about her and loves her. We can see that deep down she holds this belief when she states “My lord. He hath importuned me with love in honourable fashion.” Although she is undoubtedly still confused in his intentions as she replies to her father “I do not know my lord what I should believe” when asked if she believed Hamlet's tenders were sincere. It also appears Shakespeare is portraying Ophelia as still very young and naïve through this confused statement. Textual evidence (rather than talking about textual evidence use it directly to support your point) also supporting the young, naive interpretation of Ophelia is the fact that Ophelia is getting advice from her father and brother about her relationship with Hamlet at all and Ophelia’s exclamation “I shall obey, my lord”. The speech between Ophelia and her father makes me believe he has her best interests at heart and wants to protect her from any hurt that could come out of this relationship because he to sees her as young and naive ”think yourself a baby, that you have tane those tenders for true pay.” Although young and naive she is pictured at this point as relatively normal, composed and right minded. Eb, this is good! well expressed and you demonstrate both a good understanding of the play and the effective writing of a close analysis.

Ophelia clearly welcomes Hamlet's tenders of love as in extract two she exclaims “I have remembrances of yours that I have longed to re-deliver” Hamlet rejects Ophelia’s statement of her love angrily clearly taking out his frustration and ill feelings towards his mother onto Ophelia and generalising this anger to all woman. This point is illustrated in the line “marry a fool, for wise men know well enough what monsters you (women) make of them” He speaks very harshly to her and criticises her, his act clearly is devastating to Ophelia “oh woe is me, T’have seen what I have seen..” She is saddened and disheartened but also believes Hamlet to have gone mad, but not mad in love as previously suspected “heavens powers restore him!” This scene marks the beginning of Ophelia’s down would spiral into madness which is all due to Hamlets actions. This is good but some mention of Shakespeare's intention here along with references to other interactions with the characters would strengthen your didcussion. Consider also how they relate to other characters in the play.

Extract three is following Ophelia’s fathers murder at the hand of Hamlet himself, Ophelia is truly on the brink of madness now as the man she loved and had believed to love her had rejected her harshly and made her feel a fool as well as irrationally taking the life of her beloved father. Ophelia’s actions portray she has gone mad as she is running about the castle singing to herself and handing out what she clams to be flowers. Very discriptive imagery is used throughout this scene and Ophelia is pictured as shabby in apperaence. Laertes states about the flowers “this is nothing but matter” and also refers to Ophelia’s madness as “A document in madness” Ophelia mentions her father’s death when she talks about the violets withering and dying. This is one of the last scenes in the play featuring Ophelia before she drowns. 1251982007 Good that you make an observation about Ophelia's attire, considering her physical actions adds further depth to your analysis. How do Hamlet's reactions to her alter as a result of her physical behaviour. Think too about Hamlet and his character; does he respond differently in these extracts than in other parts of the text. Another area you could look at in more depth is the underlying ideas contained within the extracts. Are there themes contained in these that are consistant with the rest of the text? Are there striking differences? Overall this is a very good analysis Ebony, well done!! 1251985810

Act 1, Scene-

Hamlet meets the ghost of his father in this act, this is significant to the rest of the play as it raises many questions for Hamlet such as if the ghost is indeed telling the truth or not and what he should do about finding out and how to react to this situation This in turn sets a path for Hamlets upcoming actions as he seeks truth then tries to avenge his father. Hamlet questions the truthfulness of the ghost in the beginning and then in turn creates his devious plan to have a play shown portraying events to the king to guage his reaction and discover the truth. It also leads the reader to question if the ghost is a symptom of Hamlet's madness and not part of reality which fits with and is part of an important ongoing theme in the play Hamlet- perception vs reality. The ghost asks Hamlet to avenge him, when Hamlet believes the ghost is telling the truth he does (does what?). If Hamlet had not have seen the ghost this play would have played out in the same way (don't get your point here Eb ), there would basically not be a play as Hamlet would never had learned the truth and tried to avenge his father. Therefore, this is a very inportant scene both for the question perception and reality as well as Hamlet's madness, setting a path for Hamlet's upcomming actions and how the rest of the play evolves. Ebony, remember to use a possesive apostrophe when talking about something belonging to Hamlet. This is a good choice of scene and you've done a good job of identifying the important elements within it. Well done! 1251611050

A parody of Hamlet- Something is rotten in Denmark, I see Hamlet - to be or not to be! The ghost of thy father is calling to thee Hamlet - what is reality?

Your mother and uncle have wed You wish him dead You've messed up Ophelia Killed her old man instead

So was it dreamt of in your philosophy? Hamlet -- to be or not to be!

Rosenkrantz, Guilderstern -- they got the boot. Hamlet! Hamlet! Go get the king! Your old friends from school have played you like a flute Hamlet! Hamlet! The play's the thing!

Laertes has turned, wants revenge You've exposed king's lies Swordplay -- you fought and you lost, almost everyone dies

This story is a tragedy, but it's not dull Now Ho-ratio holds Yorick's skull.

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//__ Close Analysis Hamlet Act 3 scene 1 and 5 scene 1- __// These extracts reflect on Hamlets relationship to Ophelia. Hamlets tone in the first act is angry and bitter, in the second act it has changed and is shocked and remorseful. In the lead up just before extract one Claudius, Gertrude, Ophelia and Polonius have come up with the theory that Hamlet has gone mad due to his love for Ophelia and wish to test that this is indeed the reason for Hamlets madness by spying on a meeting between Hamlet and Ophelia in which Ophelia wishes to give Hamlet tokens of love just he has before given to Ophelia. In These two extracts more layers of Hamlet as a character are revealed, we see more of his “madness” and reasons behind it and the Relationship between Hamlet and Ophelia and how Hamlet feels about Ophelia is further explored. //Ebony this is a good intro. At the start it's a little bit step by step. Your ideas are good but it still lacks a little flow.// Extract one is the scene // (this phrase sounds a little awkward) // of Ophelia and Hamlets meeting, one changes that occur due to this passage is it becomes clear to the other characters that Hamlets love for Ophelia isn’t the reason for his madness and that it may not be madness at all but “something in his sole” also after this incident his family decide to send Hamlet away to England to hopefully recover from whatever is making him “mad”. Another change is that Hamlet and Ophelia’s relationship is effectively ruined, Hamlet is very cruel to Ophelia in this passage and tells her heatedly to “get the to a nunnery” and that he never really loved her. Hamlet then declares in an angry tone “I say we will have no mo marriages.” He is taking out his anger towards the marriage of Gertrude and his uncle so soon after his fathers death on Ophelia and is generalising his anger and dissatisfaction of their marriage to all marriages and all women. We see this when he says “marry a fool, for wise men know well enough what monsters you (women) make of them.” This situation is distressing to Ophelia, seeing a man she loves and whom she previously had believed to love her react to her advances and tokens of love. She responds by begging heavenly powers to help him and cure him of his perceived madness and to bring him back to the kind King Hamlet she had previously known. This Act changes Ophelia as a character, she has lost Hamlets love and verbally abused by him, this is the beginning of a series of the events which leads to her eventual downfall and madness. This passage is a contrast to the next passage in which Hamlets true feelings towards Ophelia are revealed “I loved Ophelia.” Hamlet appears to reflect regret in his tone in regards to what he said to her in Act 3 as he sees her lying dead in her grave. This also supports the theory that Hamlet was projecting his feelings towards Gertrude and her marriage onto Ophelia and his anger although directed at her was for Gertrude. We see another side to Hamlet in comparison to how he was painted in extract one, this passage then leads into Hamlet’s contemplation life and death and the fragile nature of life. The tension between Hamlet and Ophelia’s brother can be felt in this extract. These two extracts are important to the text Hamlet because they reflect on how Hamlet and Ophelia’s relationship evolves and changes throughout the corse of the novel and presenting a cause and effect pattern. Hamlets actions and madness leads to Ophelia’s eventual madness and suicide. More layers are built up and exposed to the reader for both Hamlet and Ophelia as characters and the plot of the novel as a whole. Ebony Britt

// Ebony, you're getting really good at identifying elements of the texts, their similarities and differences. The next step you need to take is to look at how you slot these ideas together. You need to weave the ideas together more so it's less stilted when you read back over your response.Your use of textual evidence is good as are your links to other stages of the play. Just watch your expression and think about the language more and the author's intention and his impact on the reader. Don't forget to expand upon how the characters see each other. //

Close Analysis- act 1 scene 2.

This passage is all about describing Hamlets anger and disgust towards his mother for marrying uncle and only two months after his fathers (her husbands) passing, His belief is that his mother should still be morning his wonderful father not up and married already and to the kings own brother. He refers to the marriage as being “(of) wicked speed and incestuous.” He also believes he should not and/or can not express his feeling towards the speedy marriage to his mother or uncle “for I must hold my tongue”, but doesn’t say why this is so. //Ebony watch really simple things like spelling and punctuation. These simple errors detract from your good ideas. The "hold my tongue" quote requires some speculation on your part what do you think Shakespeare means by this? What does it tell us about Hamlet. Maybe that he doesn't want to rock the boat by commenting. Maybe he's saving his anger and disgust for a bigger more significant revenge. Is this typical of his personality as we know it in other parts of the text?// The language used in this passage is very descriptive and the effect of this is Hamlets strong emotions towards his mother and the marriage are clearly felt through out, he is still morning when his mother remarries. He also discusses his father and describes him as “excellent a king” and believes he is undeserving of what he sees as the disrespectful unfaithfulness of his former wife. This passage is important to the rest of the novel as it shows what emotions hamlet is struggling with and the trigger for his “madness”. Also part of the cause and effect pattern, hamlets uncle murders his own brother and weds his wife- hamlets anger and “madness” (wether real or part of a plan). Hamlet believes this marriage is a terrable idea and nothing good at all will come out of it “it is not, nor it cannot come to good.” Hamlet only looks at things from his own perspective in this passage and doesn’t think about his mothers feelings or reasons behind the marriage nor his uncles, possibly because his immense anger at the situation stops him from doing so. The inability to see things from others perspective in this passage also makes Hamlet appear quite young in age. // In this paragraph you make some good observations and demonstrate some good original ideas in the interpretation. What parts of the text led you to come to these conclusions? //

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Literature close analysis- A major theme in Bypass’s and highlighted in these extracts is relationships, Bypass’s autobiographical nature allows Michael McGirr to outline his views and values he holds one of these strong views is that relationships are important. People need others and need to be part of something bigger than themselves. Michael McGirr makes reference to //Waiting for Godot// and //The Wizard of Oz// in the third extract, this is because in //The Wizard of Oz// McGirr viewed the characters as being “all powerful” whereas in //Waiting for Godot// they are represented as being “powerless”. He doesn’t value either one of these ideas and is using these two comparative texts in order to highlight the views and values he does hold in regard to relationships and being part of a community. He views both //Waiting for Godot// and //The Wizard of Oz// as both the wrong way to approach life, McGirr highly values people working together and helping each other as a team or community and this value is reflected again and again throughout Bypass. The reader can see this is McGirr’s point of view when he says “If we could do everything ourselves, we wouldn’t need other people and we wouldn’t need a road” This extract helps to develops McGirr as a character because it allows the reader to get a better idea about what views and values influence McGirr’s actions and allows the readers to uncover the layers of views and values that have made him who he is at that point of the novel. His past context of being a priest as part of the Jesuit community would have strongly influenced this value of community and working together not going through life alone. McGirr had spent the majority of his life working with others in the community doing weddings and mass and stated “I could count on running into people I knew anywhere in the metropolitas and there was always someone else I could drop off and see before I finally went home” Michael McGirr also uses Bypass to illustrate the isolation that the Hume Highway can have for many people who spend there lives working on it such as truck drivers and how this way of life impacts on their relationships and families in a negative sence. McGirr can relate to the isolation truck drivers experience as he is also isolated from friends and family back home while travelling the Hume on his push and even to an extent when he teams up with Jenny. McGirr however uses his journey of the Hume as a means of becoming closer to Jenny. He states when he first starts out of the Journey “I felt like I was cycling toward Jenny, it was to early to tell her that though.” Towards the end of the Journey McGirr forms a romantic relationship with Jenny and then after they marry starts a family. This type of relationship is new to McGirr and it makes him realise looking back that when he was a priest speaking on issues such as marriage and relationships McGirr “usually knew much less about them than I thought I did.” Actually being in a relationship proved to be more complicated than it looked from the outside when cancelling others. McGirr values making a difference in others lives but the first extract when talking about his life as a priest McGirr sates “I’m sure that the work I was doing mattered to people but there’s a difference between thinking your work is important and thinking your important because you d the work. I’m afraid I was beginning to think I was important because of what I did.” McGirr saw this as one of the reasons o leave the Jesuit community and help people in a different context - as a friend that wanted to be involved and help instead of a priest where it was part of the job description. McGirr turned his whole life in a completely different direction. He moved to Gunning form Melbourne city and left hi sold job. He likened in to being “evicted, divorced and fired all on the same day except its a choice you make for yourself” letting go of his role in this context helped him to develop different relationships such as his relationship with Jenny he wouldn’t have otherwise developed. All these extracts show us in one way or another how McGirr values relationships and how his views and values were influenced by his life as a priest. All of these three extracts given relate directly to relationships and community and highlight the views and values McGirr holds in relation to relationships and community and in life in general. The context of McGirr previously being a priest most of his life also has a big influence on his views and values.

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